Moriah Leila

Sorry it has taken me awhile to get to this review. Here is my format for reviews, I tend to get the nitpicky stuff out of the way first and ...

You did really good improving that first part. I saw that you took some of my suggestions. I really found nothing wrong in the first part so I am going ...

I am going to review this in pieces, kind of how you posted them. In the future, it might be better to split these pieces up so that it would ...

“Your horse is a little strange,” a voice from behind him said. “It's willing to fly in the front ranks of any battle, but when it comes to getting wet, ...

The cutthroat's intimidating, slow stride accompanied him to the counter. Accompanied? It sounds almost like the cutthroat's stride is walking next to him. I don't think accompanied is the proper ...

I didn't have time to read what other people had to say, so I apologize if I repeat anything that has already been said. I want to focus more on ...

Well done, this is much improved! A lot of the corrections I had to made were just grammar, so that is fantastic! Perhaps our world is real, but perhaps it ...

I didn't read any of the other critiques, so I apologize if I repeat anything. It really helped how short you kept this, so that I was able to really ...

Here is your review as requested. My keyboard has been on the fritz, so please excuse any misspellings. "Come on everybody, pull your cards and get in line!" a tall ...

Here is my review, as requested. My keyboard is being kind of tupid, so if I am missing letters just ignore my spelling. Preamble: The very first part of your ...

Okay, so here is the review as requested. My 's' key is sticking so if I am missing some here and there please excuse it. Grammar: I know you didn't ...

Good job, I was very entertained. I was going to nitpick it but Pippiedooda pretty much covered all that. As for the ending, what if you got rid of the ...

Wow, very good. It grabbed my attention and I was totally enthralled once I started reading. I definitely want to read more, so PM me when you post more. Honestly, ...

Rob Newmire walked from his home to his car. It was a very all-American setting. Heading out to his nine to five job, just early enough to beat the traffic ...

I didn't read any of the previous comments before me, so if I repeat something I apologize. Also, I am not going to attempt to correct your grammar since I ...